Arthur, when he reviewed Watermark, said that his one complaint was too few audio posts.
I keep forgetting.
So here is an audio post of the poem below, with a couple of edits. Doing an audio is a reminder of the importance of reading your work out loud; weaknesses the eye misses are clear to the ear.
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thank you for putting that poem in audio, enjoyed it and your voice
Posted by: msdedi | 25 January 2005 at 06:09 PM
How strange and surprising it is to hear a voice. Your voice.
I like this poem very much.
Posted by: Rachel | 25 January 2005 at 06:55 PM
Very nice! I liked both edits, particularly beneath for below. My writing teacher has been encouraging us to read our work aloud. It's remarkable what one finds upon doing that.
Posted by: Kimberly | 26 January 2005 at 09:19 AM
yea but is it apome, or jes a bunch of emotional blather?
why u callin that a verse?
Posted by: | 27 January 2005 at 12:17 AM
Pleasant. The smile became laughter in the poem. laughter because it rolled better from the tongue smile and said too hissed? A small smile I can picture better. For what it's worth mentioning. Audio's nice.
Posted by: Pearl | 01 February 2005 at 12:42 PM
Quite right, it was for sound. But I may reconsider . . .
Posted by: SB | 02 February 2005 at 02:50 PM