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25 June 2008


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i really like the train of thought on this one,, isn't it funny how a thing as simple as hair can become such a perplexing subject... and yet,, in the second stanza,, you bring to light how thoughts about it,, invade even the garden... very nicely done piece....

Jim Murdoch

It's a simple and effective piece this. I particularly enjoyed the second stanza although my first reaction was that it was out of place. One should take care not to make snap judgements, shouldn't one? I read a poem a few days ago where a child describes his father in terms of body parts. It's certainly not a new approach but you approach it well.

One thing I felt was missing was:

Braided, I'm a matron;
knotted, a librarian;
down, I'm a [              ]

and, of course, you can say a lot by what you choose to say – or not say – here.

I think the title might be stronger too. It works – and I don't have any suggestions – but you might want to think about it.


I relate to the melancholy tone of the narrator, who seems to wonder if the hair is worth it. Interesting how the thoughts move from the body to nature, turning the observations of the world into an extended metaphor of the thoughts about the body.


I like the way you move through this - a thought processing that works well.

Sweet Talking Guy

Yeah, I think you've got something there, I like the way you title it "Why cut your hair?" but can you live with it?


I, too, like the transition from thinking about your hair to noticing the flowers, to thinking about your hair. it's often the way our minds work...

I am growing my hair (for Locks of Love), too, and sometimes experience just what you mention. I had not thought to write a poem about it but it works so well here!

stan ski

If only hair grew like summer's flowers - stronger and brighter, instead of thining and greying.


i enjoyed this - grow and give my hair away myself, i've done it three times now. you could find something about the sweat on the back of the neck perhaps. thank you

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