Snow. Rain. Snow. Ice.
It’s cold here.
And treacherous.
I am contemplating
big words. Courage.
Compassion. Connection.
Backyard birds huddle
under the eves. Ice thickens
on the face of the pond.
Courage: from heart
Compassion: to sit with suffering
Connection: a circle of friends
The streets are a maze
of unfortunate collisions.
Wreck after frozen wreck.
A squirrel eats corn
umbrellaed
by his snowy tail.
This week's prompt was: Ask your friend alliteration to help you write a word list...
Critiques welcome.
Nice string of haiku. I loved the last one the best.
Posted by: vivienne Blake | 14 January 2011 at 09:14 AM
You have created a feeling of warmth from the coldness.
Boy do I feel like a dummy. I read this a one piece.
Then I saw Viv's comment.
Posted by: pamelasayers | 14 January 2011 at 10:27 AM
Don't feel like a dummy -- I wrote this as one piece. I do write a lot of haiku (or smallpoems) so that's no doubt why this came out as it did.
Posted by: sbpoet | 14 January 2011 at 11:01 AM
The imagery is vivid and energetic - cute squirrel...
Posted by: Tumblewords | 14 January 2011 at 12:47 PM
I love how you define the words in the center of the poem. Very effective.
Posted by: twitches | 14 January 2011 at 01:33 PM
Corn, a nice small word.
Posted by: Dan Wilcox | 14 January 2011 at 06:27 PM
Very clever... I can easily picture you and your surroundings. I love the maze in the street!
Posted by: Laurie Kolp | 15 January 2011 at 08:32 AM
so nice to read and I sort of feel like I'm looking over your shoulder while reading it...love the squirrel pic!
Posted by: Jeanne Aguilar | 15 January 2011 at 11:03 AM
Squirrels are adorable. I hate it when people call em rats with a furry tale. I grew up surrounded by them and i only think of them as fairy tale creatures.
Leon
Posted by: Leon's Escapades | 15 January 2011 at 11:32 AM
feels of a whole to me. complex & studied. I love the feeding rituals of winter.
Posted by: deb | 15 January 2011 at 09:11 PM